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Pleasure by ~Haptic145:iconHaptic145:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Spoken Word


Pleasure

It's uncontrollable
It's rechargeable
It's ecstatic
It's irresistible
It's untamable
It's immeasurable
It's inevitable
Its trouble
Its warm
It's so good
It's gushy
It's mad
It's erotic
It's messy
It's vigorous
It's spontaneous
It's hot
It's real
It's compasionate
It's passionate
It's sexy
It's continuous
It's loving
It's written in stone
It's open
It's comprised of different techniques
It's painful
It's a joyous occasion
It's stabilizing
It's violating
It's eccentric
It's exotic
It's colorful
It's Art
It's a Kodak moment
©2009-2010 ~Haptic145
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Isnt it true?

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~Zephite Nov 2, 2009, 8:42:40 PM
It is true. this is a nice piece, but I think it could really benefit from some surreal imagery or some lines running on to the next.

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~Yelir's soul may be mine, but my heart is forever his.


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~Haptic145 Nov 10, 2009, 5:28:54 AM
i kind of get what your saying could you give me an example

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"I color my world prismacolor".........
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~Zephite Nov 10, 2009, 9:34:00 AM
like, instead of saying its messy, use a metaphor or simile to convey the messiness.

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~Yelir's soul may be mine, but my heart is forever his.


Icon (c) ~haine905

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Mood: Relief ~Haptic145 Nov 10, 2009, 5:37:38 PM
oh ok i understand thanks i really needed that

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"I color my world prismacolor".........
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~Zephite Nov 10, 2009, 5:58:15 PM
yeah. 8D
repetitiveness is good in poetry but too much can be a problem.

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~Yelir's soul may be mine, but my heart is forever his.


Icon (c) ~haine905

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~Haptic145 Nov 11, 2009, 8:30:02 PM
have you read my new stuff and some of my older stuff

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"I color my world prismacolor".........
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~Zephite Nov 11, 2009, 8:57:37 PM
no i have not, though i should!

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~Yelir's soul may be mine, but my heart is forever his.


Icon (c) ~haine905

:iconhaptic145:
~Haptic145 Nov 12, 2009, 5:01:03 AM
yes feel free at any time

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"I color my world prismacolor".........
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